Thursday, 26 November 2020

 The small light brown mouse, the medium white mouse and the huge black mouse as strong as steel  were breaking in through the back door of the museum. They know that they only have ten seconds before the alarm will be triggered. They want to steal the golden piece of cheese which is in the middle of the hundred acre museum. They sprint into the elevator which judders to a stop halfway between the two  floors. The big black mouse punches the the cable cover open. “We're going out onto the wire!” 


They get to the right floor and then they start to chew open the door. They were distracted about the alarm. They squeeze through the door and the alarm goes off! They run to the cheese and dodge all the  lasers. Luckily they get  the cheese. Suddenly they notice there police cars everywhere! A swat team  came just for little mice. They escape the trouble with the golden piece of cheese.


1 comment:

  1. Hey jericho
    I really like your story. Maybe next time have a couple more paragraphs instead of bunching things up

    But amazing story have a good day

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